|08-08-2009, 01:55 PM||#1|
Sniper Operations CMDR
Join Date: Jun 2007
Location: On a rooftop near you.
Before the Sommers Joe movie was green-lit, I was writing a script myself ... funny, it went by the same name.
I am going to post the first couple of pages here, have a read and let me know your thoughts ... if there is interested, I will continue to post more.
I had only finished 60(ish) pages before I stopped, but I will also finish it if there is interest.
Here is the first few pages -- enjoy (and seriously, let me know what you think ... also keep in mind, the format is off due to the forum set up)...
1. Ext. United Nations Building - Day
( Focus ) on the United Nations building in New York. All seems like a peaceful day. There are blue skies above, with a few white clouds hovering here and there. Birds are flying by. People are busy in the courtyard, lots of people are lost in conversations when; the building suddenly erupts in an explosion that rips the front of the building to shreds and blows the back out.
People who are still alive are running for cover while fires erupt and secondary explosions begin going off in the building.
2. Ext. Coast of England - Day
In the oceans off the coast of England, the U.S.S. Diligent and the H.M.S. Constitution are moving in practice maneuvers. Three Raptor, F-22 are flying in low when suddenly; they are knocked out of the sky in large fire balls and the two ships are ripped to shreds in amazing fire balls that look like small nuclear explosion.
3. Ext. Sky Over Atlantic Ocean - Day
Air Force One is flying over the Atlantic en route to Andrews Air Force Base when suddenly all four engines explode and the planes drops like a rock into the cold waters below. There is no way there could be any survivors.
4. Ext. Red Square, Moscow - Night
The Red Square, Moscow. People are busy about their day to day business. The camera draws back into the air high above the square to show more of Moscow and suddenly; a small nuclear explosion goes off in the heart of the square.
5. Int. Pentagon SITCOM - Day
General Lawrence Flagg is walking up to SITCOM. Lt. James Marshall (code name: Static) is working on some controls, as life is extremely busy in the background.
General Abernathy is already looking over some satellite images. He looks up at the General.
What is the SITREP General Abernathy?
General Abernathy looks up at General Flagg quickly and snaps to attention, saluting. General Flagg returns the salute in kind.
(lowering his hand)
Sir, we’ve had four major events. Threat clock is reading red and we are hearing chatter that this is only the beginning.
General Flagg takes the images Abernathy is handing to him and quickly leafs through them. He looks back at Abernathy.
Was the president on the plane?
No General. The President is safe, but Vice President Blake was on Air Force One, en route to Moscow.
General Flagg is looking at the images again as General Austin walks up. Both General Flagg and General Abernathy stand at attention and salute the older general. General Austin salutes back.
Both General Flagg and General Abernathy relax their pose a little.
What have the Joint Chiefs decided in regard to Operation: Delta?
Static looks up at General Abernathy.
General Abernathy, you and the Generals might want to see this sir.
Static is pointing to the set of monitors at the front of SITCOM. The three generals turn and look.
Suddenly the image on the monitors changes from command/ops to a man sitting in a large chair. The chair is ancient royal, with an ornate cobra head at the top. Its cushions are a plush blood red. The man is dressed in a blue military suit, not unlike the generals, he has black boots on, they go up his legs to mid-calf, but the oddest part of his outfit is his hood. It is a separate hood covering his head completely. It only has two eye holes and between and above the eyes, again, a cobra symbol.
Man on Monitors
(stretching his S’s like a snake)
My name is Cobra Commander.
As you surly know by now, I have the power to severely hurt not only you’re United States of America, but other nations of the world. Starting tomorrow, my Cobra forces will begin a campaign that will end in my total control of this planet. Try nothing to stop us, or suffer the most severe of consequences.
The screens all switch back to their original operations.
General Abernathy looks at Static who is busy working on some controls.
Did we get a trace?
Static looks up at the general.
Negative sir. He wasn’t on long enough, but I did get a location of his jammer system. It’s in…
6. Ext. Sky over Scotland – Day
The Osprey HeliJet is flying through the thick morning clouds heading toward a castle in the distance the camera follows the vehicle as it begins to slow and lowers to a landing about five hundred yards from the main gates of the castle.
Scotland. Just east of the Moors of McCloud.
The rears doors lower and ten troops rush out with weapons at ready, followed by General Abernathy and an African-American soldier in his late thirties.
(pointing at the castle)
Stalker, have the troops approach in groups of three. I’ll go with the point team. You watch rear.
Stalker looks at General Abernathy questioningly.
Come on Hawk. You know the rules…
Hawk (Abernathy) shoots Stalker a quieting look. He stops speaking and turns to join his team.
Hawk and his team are walking toward the castle gates as they begin to open. The two soldiers pull their guns to readiness. Hawk doesn’t flinch.
As they come to within a few feet of the now open gates, a large Scotsman, wearing a kilt and military garb from waist up comes out to great them.
(raising his right hand in the air)
Put your weapons at ease.
The Scotsman walks up to Hawk and he just looks at him as he lowers his hand to reach out to shake the Scotsman’s, but there is no reaction.
We have come under provisional authority of the Scottish Government to investigate…
The Scotsman throws a black box to the ground at Hawk’s feet cutting off his speech.
Hawk looks at the black box; it looks like it had been ripped out of something.
Oh… Um… I see you have found our little problem. We have a warrant to search…
Suddenly the Scotsman reaches for his weapon. The soldiers see this and aim their guns at him.
A tall man, dressed in a business suit is walking up to join the group.
Man in Suit
Hearing this, Angus removes his hand from the weapon on his belt and he turns and bows to the man in the suit.
Hawk just watches as the man comes to a stop a few feet away looking right back at him.
Man in Suit
Please allow me to apologies for Angus. He is a loyal soldier and a friend, but sometimes, he gets a little…
(shooting Angus a look)
We apologize for this intrusion, but our investigation has led us here. We have reason to believe this equipment…
(pointing at the black box)
is attached to some terrorist actions that have occurred in the last twenty-four hours.
Man in suit
Yes, I have just finished reading about those. Please accept my hospitality. My name is James McCullen, I am the laird of this castle. You will have my support and…
(looking at Angus)
the full support of my staff.
James McCullen looks back at Hawk and ushers him and the troops toward the gates.
All the troops lead the way, followed by James and Angus. Angus is looking at him questioningly.
Laird, is this wise?
James McCullen looks at Angus with an evil eye and Angus knows right away, he slows his pace and lowers his head. He looks like a school child that has just been scolded in line by his teacher.
7. Int. Library, Castle McCullen – Day
Stalker and Hawk are standing with James McCullen. A fire is burning in the background. The room is decorated in ancient Celtic art and fixtures. On the mantel, over the fire place, there is a mask made of silver. Hawk is looking at the mask and turns to speak with James.
This is an interesting piece of artwork.
It was my father’s. It comes from the early thirteenth century. It is said that it once belonged to Destro.
Hawk looks at McCullen.
Destro. Wasn’t he a warrior who once fought for the downtrodden and poor of the lands?
Yes, it is rumored that he fought at the side of William Wallace.
Isn’t that the dude from that movie? Mel Gibson played him.
McCullen shoots Stalker a harsh look.
Yes, but we here in Scotland do not have much of a liking for that movie. It is too Americanized.
(beat to look at Hawk)
Hawk smiles a sure smile at McCullen.
After reviewing all the information from our investigation here, Mr. McCullen. It is my finding that you had no previous attachment to the jamming device. We will leave you now, please accept my government’s thanks for you co-operation.
8. Ext. Osprey HeliJet – Day
Hawk and Stalker are walking together as the troops are loading themselves.
I don’t like it. That was too easy. It was almost like it was set up.
Hawk turns and waves a polite wave back to the castle were Angus is watching them from the gate, which is closing.
I know what you mean, but there is no proof of any kind of wrongdoing. He’s cleaner than clean.
Hawk and Stalker board the Osprey and the rear door closes behind them.
Suddenly the two large props power up and the Osprey rises into the air, heading back toward the open Atlantic waters.
9. Int. Osprey Command Room – Day
Hawk is standing before a vid/screen with an image of General Flagg and General Austin in the SITCOM room.
After an extensive search of Mr. McCullen’s castle, it is our conclusion that he is not involved. This conclusion is based on the lack of any evidence to prove the contrary.
But both Stalker and I believe he is involved somehow.
General Flagg rubs his chin; both he and General Austin are lost in thought for a few seconds. Finally General Austin looks up at Hawk.
General Abernathy, how soon can your teams be ready?
Hawk smiles a sly smile.
They are all ready and waiting in Wyoming, at The Rock.
Excellent. Inform your pilot to change course and proceed to The Rock.
Today your G.I.Joe team is officially called to active duty.
10. Int. Throne Room
Cobra Commander is sitting in his throne looking up at a large vid/screen with an image of James McCullen Destro, the man in the suit from the castle. Destro is now wearing his silver mask. Beside Cobra Commander, the Baroness and Zartan are listening to the conversation. Cobra Commander is holding a glass of Brandy in his right hand. A few torches spread around and the green/blue glow of the vid/screen light the room.
Are you a complete idiot, or just totally incompetent?
The Americans tracked that jammer switch in six minutes. My castle, this whole operation could have been compromised for your petty ego.
Cobra Commander looks angry at the screen.
I will have you know Destro, I do not take kindly to underlings speaking to me…
I will speak to you any way I see fit.
It is you who is forgetting his place. Don’t you forget, it’s my money that is allowing your little operation to happen.
Cobra Commander motions like he is about to say something.
Never fool yourself into believing I would allow a has-been “Used Car Salesman” to speak above his position.
Expect my arrival in twelve hours.
The vid/screen dies, and then suddenly it explodes as Cobra Commander’s glass of Brandy smashes through the screen. The liquid causes a number of sparks and a small fire to start.
Cobra Commander rises from his seat and looks at Zartan. The Baroness is just watching, her face is totally emotionless.
Who does that foreigner think he is?
If it weren’t for my brilliance, he would have no reason to fund this operation. I have brought a lot of business to his M.A.R.S. organization over the years. Right Zartan?
Completely Cobra Commander.
(pause to look at the Baroness)
But none of that will matter in a little over a day. When your operation is over and you control the free world, you can have Destro whipped like the dog he is.
The Baroness winces at that statement, but it is almost unnoticed as she coughs to clear her throat.
Cobra Commander turns and looks at the Baroness, his most trusted minion.
Is there a problem Baroness?
The Baroness looks at Cobra Commander, her eyes soft behind her glasses. Zartan is looking on eagerly to hear what she might have to say.
I think Zartan might be getting ahead of himself.
I do believe your plan is a stroke of genius, but I think we shouldn’t plan the victory party before the final battle is fought.
Zartan shoots the Baroness an evil eye. He is angered that he will once again lose favor with the commander.
The Baroness turns and looks at Zartan, there is anger deep in her eyes.
Why don’t you say that to my face?
You freak skinned son of a…
Zartan, the Baroness is right. Gloating before we have a reason will serve to do nothing but misguide the troops.
(looking at the Baroness then back at Zartan)
Leave us. I have much to discuss with the Baroness.
Zartan, angered, but not foolish enough to disrespect the commander, bows and walks out of the room. The doors slam behind him.
Cobra Commander reaches out his hand, the Baroness takes it.
Shall we adjourn to my anti-chamber for a little privacy?
The Baroness smiles. The commander begins to lead the way. Unseen by the commander, the Baroness looks at him with disgust in her eyes. Utter contempt.
The camera pans with them as they walk toward a lush room in the background. As they pass through the doors, the doors softly close behind them.
11. Int. Hallway Cobra Castle
Zartan is walking down the hallway, away from the throne room. He is angry. He stops and looks back at the doors leading to the throne room.
Zartan slams his right fist into the wall and the plaster around his fist cracks like glass from the point of impact.
Unseen by Zartan, three men walk up. The one with the blonde ponytail speaks first.
Blimey Zartan. Bad meeting with the head snake?
Zartan turns to see his Dreadnoks. Buzzer, Torch and Ripper are standing looking at him, waiting for their orders.
Is there ever a good meeting with Cobra Commander, Buzzer?
I want the three of you to call the Dreadnoks together and meet in the everglades base. I will be there tomorrow night. We need to be ready for anything.
Roger that Zartan. There trouble brewin’?
Whenever Cobra Commander is involved, there’s always trouble.
12. Ext. Wyoming Mountain Side – Early night
The Osprey HeliJet is gliding through the air, heading toward the mountains. The sun is just hitting the horizon line in the distant background. There are some lightning clouds in the distance with a few flashes of light blazing across the cloud line.
|08-09-2009, 12:35 PM||#2|
Sniper Operations CMDR
Join Date: Jun 2007
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Is it really that bad that no one has anything to say?..
|08-09-2009, 12:37 PM||#3|
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|08-09-2009, 12:52 PM||#4|
Sniper Operations CMDR
Join Date: Jun 2007
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I posted a number of pages from it, and was planning on posting more if people were interested.
I saw the real movie and loved it.
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